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21 Flamerule (late evening) - kronk9
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21 Flamerule (late evening)
It good thing there really only one road out of Olostin's Hold, because Kronk not know where he going. One road is one direction.

Things change at edge of Turlang's Wood. Road goes north and south.

What to do?

North lead to Everlund. Last time Kronk in Everlund, they ready to arrest him. That was only...two nights ago? Time move to quick for Kronk sometimes.

Wonder if Kronk still wanted there. Wonder if Kronk really wants to know.

Better off not going to Everlund.

What about south?

South lead to Noanar's Hold. Kronk not feel like getting hunted again.

So road go north and road go south. Kronk not go either way.

What about east? No, east lead back to Olostin's Hold. Not a place to be either.

Kronk could go northeast, around Everlund. Beyond Everlund is River Rauvin. There slippery trail along river. Lead to Moon Pass. Lead to Fork Road. After long while, lead to Anauroch. But first it lead through Jalanthar.

They not like half-orcs in Jalanthar. Last time Kronk there, I eating fried flatgill at the Crowing Cockatrice. Lot of orcs in the mountains, Jalanthar attacked a lot. It make people at Jalanthar loyal to each other, not people on outside. And when drunken human decide to start something with the half-orc, nobody want to be on half-orc's side. Even more not on half-orc's side when half-orc takes off ear from drunken human.

So Kronk not go northeast either. What left?

Road goes north and south and east. Road not go west.

West is the Silverwood and Greenglade and other little towns where people know Kronk. And once inside Silverwood, Kronk can go any direction. Like north to Silverymoon. Kronk not been to Silverymoon for a while.

Maybe it time to leave road.

Current Mood: tired tired

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vaudy From: vaudy Date: June 22nd, 2008 04:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
I like what you have here, in fact, I really like it, but it's a bit short.

I'm kinda walking a fine line here. I'm not saying that short posts are bad, or that every post should be the sort of mega-post Sabrina and I have been doing, and I really, really don't want us to start doling out length requirements in addition to deadlines, but it's not really fair to Danny to crack down on him to write more, and not do the same to you. (Think of it this way: asking for more is kind of a compliment.)

I hesitate to ask you to add to this, because it works out very nicely, and the end is a good end, and to make it longer might feel like padding, but I really think we need a little more story out of your next two posts, at least.
kronk9 From: kronk9 Date: June 26th, 2008 03:51 am (UTC) (Link)
OOC:

Thank you for the complimentary words.

I agree that it's rather short. And Kronk's directionlessness is a reflection of his writer's feelings.

This post is a rough. Maybe I can embellish the story about Jalanthar, but I'm getting kinda bored with stories about how the entire Silver Marches is prejudiced against half-orcs (even though if you read the Silver Marches handbook, Jalanthar would certainly be that way)(oh my, did I just split an infinitive? Yes I did...)

In other words, I don't wanna shirk, but I'm also fishing for ideas. Any bites?

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vaudy From: vaudy Date: June 26th, 2008 04:28 am (UTC) (Link)
I will have to think on it.

And no, you actually did not split an infinitive, much as I hate to disappoint you. An infinitive is a "to + verb" construction. So, to really split an infinitive, you have to put something between "to" and the verb (see what I did there?).

Furthermore, while some strict grammarians still get cranky over split infinitives, there is a growing number of grammarians and linguists who agree that it's really one of the most artificial of our grammar rules, and we've been splitting infinitives way back since Old English, and can't we just let it go, already? Basically, what happened was that when the grammar rules for modern English were being codified, some of them were based on grammar rules in Latin (I know, right?), and in Latin, the infinitive is a single word, not a compound construction like it is in English, and therefore simply impossible to split. So some yahoo decided that since you can't split infinitives in Latin, and Latin is the model by which all language should be judged, you shouldn't split infinitives in English, either, even though you bloody well can.

/grammar-history lesson
vaudy From: vaudy Date: July 1st, 2008 03:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
I still can't think of a good way to expand this. Part of the problem is that it is such an in-the-moment thing for Kronk that to break off with a longer flashback would interrupt the flow.

The only thing I can think of is, since Kronk mentions that the one road leads to the Anauroch, to mention why Kronk might think of that as a viable option (or perhaps that he really doesn't but isn't sure where to go). Still, that's only good for an extra sentence or two.
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